en_US/Installation_notes.xml

[Karsten Wade]

 en_US/Installation_notes.xml |   30 +++++++++++++++---------------
 1 file changed, 15 insertions(+), 15 deletions(-)

New commits:
commit b3a432563a7da8284d69e336f1f6b85f9e578da8
Author: Karsten 'quaid' Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date:   Thu Nov 6 13:30:56 2008 -0800

    Merged final bits from Wiki, one-way sync.
    
    * Some local changes made to wording that are not on the wiki; this is an OK practice now not to sync both ways

diff --git a/en_US/Installation_notes.xml b/en_US/Installation_notes.xml
index baabc15..c1af986 100644
--- a/en_US/Installation_notes.xml
+++ b/en_US/Installation_notes.xml
@@ -21,7 +21,8 @@
   <section id="sn-Installation_media">
     <title>Installation media</title>
     <note>
-      <title> If you intend to download the Fedora DVD ISO image, keep
+      <title>Fedora DVD ISO image is a large file.</title>
+      <para>If you intend to download the Fedora DVD ISO image, keep
 	in mind that not all file downloading tools can accommodate
 	files larger than 2 GiB in size. </title>
       <para> The programs <command>wget</command> 1.9.1-16 and above,
@@ -41,9 +42,9 @@
       For Fedora Live media, press any key during the initial boot
       countdown, to display a boot option menu.  Select
       <menuchoice><guimenuitem>Verify and
-      boot</guimenuitem></menuchoice> to perform the media test. The
-      pure installation medium can be used to verify a Fedora Live
-      medium. <application>Anaconda</application> asks during the
+      boot</guimenuitem></menuchoice> to perform the media test. 
+      Installation media can be used to verify Fedora Live
+      media. <application>Anaconda</application> asks during the
       mediacheck if you want to check any other disc than the one
       <application>Anaconda</application> is running from.  To test
       additional media, select
@@ -107,9 +108,8 @@
 	  <application>NetworkManager</application> by communicating
 	  with it via D-Bus during installation. The move to
 	  <application>NetworkManager</application> in
-	  <application>Anaconda</application> is still ongoing,
-	  but the bulk of existing
-	  functionality has been retained.
+	  <application>Anaconda</application> is still ongoing, but the
+	  bulk of existing functionality has been retained.
 	  <application>NetworkManager</application> is enabled by
 	  default on newly installed systems, so moving to
 	  <application>NetworkManager</application> in
@@ -129,8 +129,8 @@
 	  using the Fedora mirrorlist URL as the installation source.
 	  The method selection screen no longer appears by default. If
 	  you do not wish to use the mirrorlist URL, either add
-	  <literal>repo=<replaceable><your installation
-	    source></replaceable></literal> or add
+	  <option>repo=<replaceable><your installation
+	    source></replaceable></option> or add
 	  <option>askmethod</option> to the installer boot parameters.
 	  The <option>askmethod</option> option causes the selection
 	  screen to appear as it did in previous releases. To add boot
@@ -149,9 +149,9 @@
     <section id="PXE_booting_from_a_.iso">
       <title>PXE booting from a <filename>.iso</filename></title>
       <para>When PXE booting and using a <filename>.iso</filename> file
-	for the installation media via NFS you are now required to add
+	mounted via NFS	for the installation media, add
 	<userinput>method=nfsiso:server:/path</userinput> to the command
-	line.</para>
+	line.  This is a new requirement.</para>
     </section>
     <section id="sn-IDE_device_names">
       <title>IDE device names</title>
@@ -250,16 +250,16 @@
 	<screen>
 	  <userinput>su -c 'e2label /dev/example f7-slash'</userinput>
 	</screen>
-	<para>For a VFAT filesystem use <command>dosfslabel</command>
+	<para>For a VFAT file system use <command>dosfslabel</command>
 	  from the <package>dosfstools</package> package, and for NTFS
-	  filesystem use <command>ntfslabel</command> from the
+	  file system use <command>ntfslabel</command> from the
 	  <package>ntfsprogs</package> package. Before rebooting the
 	  machine, also update the file system mount entries, and the
 	  GRUB kernel root entry.</para>
       </section>
       <section id="sn-Update_the_file_system_mount_entries">
 	<title>Update the file system mount entries</title>
-	<para>If any filesystem labels were added or modified, then the
+	<para>If any file system labels were added or modified, then the
 	  device entries in <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> must be
 	  adjusted to match: </para>
 	<screen>
@@ -276,7 +276,7 @@
 	<title>Update the <filename>grub.conf</filename> kernel root
 	  entry</title>
 	<para>If the label for the <filename>/</filename> (root)
-	  filesystem was modified, the kernel boot parameter in the grub
+	  file system was modified, the kernel boot parameter in the grub
 	  configuration file must also be modified: </para>
 	<screen>
 	  <userinput>su -c 'gedit /boot/grub/grub.conf'</userinput>