en_US/new-users.xml
Karsten Wade
quaid at fedoraproject.org
Fri Nov 7 20:21:56 UTC 2008
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1 file changed, 37 insertions(+), 33 deletions(-)
New commits:
commit 99452469976f142b30088eecf814a2f42c80f35f
Author: Karsten 'quaid' Wade <kwade at calliope.phig.org>
Date: Fri Nov 7 12:20:26 2008 -0800
language improvements, clarity, formatting fixes
diff --git a/en_US/new-users.xml b/en_US/new-users.xml
index 8fd8e38..1d74861 100644
--- a/en_US/new-users.xml
+++ b/en_US/new-users.xml
@@ -15,7 +15,7 @@
<para>
This chapter explains how to get the files you need to install and
run &DISTRO; on your computer. Concepts in this chapter
- may be new, especially if this is your first free
+ may be new, especially if this is your first free and open source
operating system. If you have any trouble with this chapter, find
help by visiting the Fedora Forums at <ulink
url="http://www.fedoraforum.org/"/>.
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@
<tip>
<title>Download Links</title>
<para>
- To follow a Web based guide to downloading, visit <ulink
+ To follow a Web-based guide to downloading, visit <ulink
url="http://get.fedoraproject.org/"/>. For guidance on which
architecture to download, refer to <xref
linkend="sn-which-arch"/>.
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@
<para>Source code on DVD media</para>
</listitem>
</itemizedlist>
- <para>Most users want the Live image or the full set of
+ <para>Most users want the &DISTRO; Live image or the full set of
installable software on DVD or CDs. The reduced bootable images are
suitable for use with a fast Internet connection and install &DISTRO;
on one computer. Source code discs are not used for installing &DISTRO;,
@@ -99,12 +99,12 @@
<para>Mirrors publish &DISTRO; software under a well-organized
hierarchy of folders. For example, the &DISTRO; &DISTROVER;
distribution normally appears in the directory <filename
- class="directory">&FEDLC;/linux/releases/&DISTROVER;/</filename>.
+ class="directory">&FEDLC;/linux/releases/&DISTROVER;/</filename>.
This directory contains a folder for each architecture supported
by that release of &DISTRO;. CD and DVD media files appear
- inside that folder, in a folder called iso/. For example, you
- can find the file for the DVD distribution of &DISTRO;
- &DISTROVER; for x86_64 at
+ inside that folder, in a folder called
+ <filename>iso/</filename>. For example, you can find the file
+ for the DVD distribution of &DISTRO; &DISTROVER; for x86_64 at
<filename>&FEDLC;/linux/releases/&DISTROVER;/x86_64/iso/&FCX;-&DISTROVER;-x86_64-DVD.iso</filename>.</para>
</section>
<section id="sn-which-download-bt">
@@ -151,12 +151,12 @@
or type of computer processor. Use the following table to
determine the architecture of your computer according to the type
of processor. Consult your manufacturer's documentation for
- details on your processor if necessary.</para>
+ details on your processor, if necessary.</para>
<indexterm>
<primary>architecture</primary>
<secondary>determining</secondary>
</indexterm>
- <segmentedlist>
+ <segmentedlist id="List-Processor_and_Architecture_Types">
<title>Processor and Architecture Types</title>
<segtitle>Processor Manufacturer and Model</segtitle>
<segtitle>Architecture Type for &DISTRO;</segtitle>
@@ -180,16 +180,18 @@
<tip>
<title><systemitem>i386</systemitem> Works for Most Windows
Compatible Computers</title>
- <para>If you are unsure what type of processor your computer uses,
- and your computer is not a non-Intel based Apple Macintosh, choose
+ <para>If you are unsure what type of processor your computer uses, choose
<systemitem>i386</systemitem>.</para>
+ <para>The exception is if your computer is a non-Intel based Apple
+ Macintosh. Refer to <xref
+ linkend="List-Processor_and_Architecture_Types"/> for more information.</para>
</tip>
<tip>
<title>Intel Atom Processor Architectures Vary</title>
<para>The N and Z Series Atom processors are based on the
<systemitem>i386</systemitem> architecture. The 230 and 330 Series
Atom processors are based on the<systemitem>x86_64</systemitem>
- architecture. See <ulink url="http://ark.intel.com/cpugroup.aspx?familyID=29035"/> for more details. </para>
+ architecture. Refer to <ulink url="http://ark.intel.com/cpugroup.aspx?familyID=29035"/> for more details. </para>
</tip>
</section>
<section id="sn-which-files">
@@ -223,11 +225,12 @@
your computer, download the Live image version. If your
computer supports booting from CD, you can boot the
operating system without making any changes to your hard
- disk. The Live image also provides an "Install to Hard Disk"
- desktop shortcut. If you decide you like what you see, and want
- to install it, simply activate the selection to copy
- &DISTRO; to your hard disk. You can download the Live image
- directly from a mirror, or using BitTorrent.</para>
+ disk. The Live image also provides an <guiicon>Install to
+ Hard Disk</guiicon> desktop shortcut. If you decide you
+ like what you see, and want to install it, simply activate
+ the selection to copy &DISTRO; to your hard disk. You can
+ download the Live image directly from a mirror, or using
+ BitTorrent.</para>
</formalpara>
<!-- <note>
<title>No Live Images for <systemitem>ppc</systemitem></title>
@@ -253,15 +256,16 @@
<tip>
<title>Download Size</title>
<para>Installing the default software for &DISTRO; over the
- Internet requires more time than the Live image, but less time
- than the entire DVD distribution. Actual results depend on
- the actual software you select and network traffic
+ Internet requires more time than the Live image, but less
+ time than the entire DVD distribution. Actual results
+ depend on the software you select and network traffic
conditions.</para>
</tip>
</listitem>
</orderedlist>
<para>The following table explains where to find the desired files
- on a mirror site.</para>
+ on a mirror site. Replace <replaceable>arch</replaceable> with
+ the architecture of the computer being installed.</para>
<segmentedlist>
<title>Locating Files</title>
<segtitle>Media Type</segtitle>
@@ -284,8 +288,9 @@
<section id="sn-making-media">
<title>How Do I Make &DISTRO; Media?</title>
<para>
- You can turn &DISTRO; ISO files into either CD or DVD discs. You
- can turn &DISTRO; Live ISO files into bootable USB media.
+ A &DISTRO; ISO file can be turned into either CD or DVD discs.
+ Turn &DISTRO; Live ISO files into bootable USB media, as well as
+ a CD or DVD.
</para>
<section id="sn-making-disc-media">
<title>Making CD or DVD Discs</title>
@@ -297,31 +302,30 @@
<section>
<title>Making USB Media</title>
<para>
- To make bootable USB media, use a &DISTRO; Live image. You can
- use either a Windows or Linux system to make the bootable USB
- media.
+ To make bootable USB media, use a &DISTRO; Live image. Use
+ either a Windows or Linux system to make the bootable USB media.
</para>
<note>
<title>USB Image Writing is Nondestructive</title>
<para>
Writing the Live image to the USB media is
<emphasis>nondestructive</emphasis>. Any existing data on the
- media will not be harmed.
+ media is not harmed.
</para>
</note>
<para>
- Before you begin, make sure you have sufficient free space
- available on your USB media. You do not need to repartition or
- reformat your media. <emphasis>It is always a good idea to back
- up important data before performing sensitive disk
- operations.</emphasis>
+ To begin, make sure there is sufficient free space available on
+ the USB media. There is no need to repartition or reformat
+ your media. <emphasis>It is always a good idea to back up
+ important data before performing sensitive disk
+ operations.</emphasis>
</para>
<section>
<title>USB Image Creation from Windows</title>
<procedure>
<step>
<para>
- Download a Live ISO file as shown in <xref linkend="sn-which-files"/>.
+ Download a Live ISO file as explained in <xref linkend="sn-which-files"/>.
</para>
</step>
<step>
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