Branch 'f12-temp' - en-US/AmateurRadio.xml en-US/ArchSpecific.xml en-US/Desktop.xml en-US/Devel-Eclipse.xml en-US/HardwareOverview.xml en-US/Networking.xml en-US/OverView.xml en-US/Release_Notes.xml en-US/Virtualization.xml en-US/Welcome.xml
John J. McDonough
jjmcd at fedoraproject.org
Mon Nov 16 22:18:52 UTC 2009
en-US/AmateurRadio.xml | 6 +++---
en-US/ArchSpecific.xml | 19 +++++++++----------
en-US/Desktop.xml | 4 ++--
en-US/Devel-Eclipse.xml | 29 +++++++++++++++++++++++------
en-US/HardwareOverview.xml | 13 +++++++------
en-US/Networking.xml | 8 ++++----
en-US/OverView.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Release_Notes.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Virtualization.xml | 2 +-
en-US/Welcome.xml | 2 +-
10 files changed, 52 insertions(+), 35 deletions(-)
New commits:
commit af011f60d3b975e1c5bb922ca5f1e532940d3d91
Author: John J. McDonough <jjmcd at fedoraproject.org>
Date: Mon Nov 16 17:18:14 2009 -0500
Minor typos and usage corrections
diff --git a/en-US/AmateurRadio.xml b/en-US/AmateurRadio.xml
index 353ab77..52a074f 100644
--- a/en-US/AmateurRadio.xml
+++ b/en-US/AmateurRadio.xml
@@ -12,9 +12,9 @@
Electronic Lab spin. Interesting applications may also be found
under Circuit Design, Embedded Development, and Science and
Mathematics. For a complete list of amateur radio applications
- available within Fedora see <citetitle>Applications
- for amateur radio</citetitle> at <ulink type="http"
- url="https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Applications_for_Amateur_Radio"></ulink> on the wiki.
+ available within Fedora refer to <ulink type="http"
+ url="https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Applications_for_Amateur_Radio"></ulink>
+ on the wiki.
</para>
<para>
diff --git a/en-US/ArchSpecific.xml b/en-US/ArchSpecific.xml
index a2c00c0..60925b6 100644
--- a/en-US/ArchSpecific.xml
+++ b/en-US/ArchSpecific.xml
@@ -12,15 +12,15 @@
<section id="sect-Release_Notes-Architecture_Specific_Notes_686">
<title>32-bit base changed to i686</title>
<para>
- Fedora 11 has i586 as the base 32-bit x86 architecture.
+ Fedora 11 had i586 as the base 32-bit x86 architecture.
</para>
<para>
For Fedora 12, we are switching to i686 as the base
- architecture (including CMOV), and optimize for Atom
- processors.
+ architecture (including CMOV), and improving support for
+ Atom processors.
</para>
<para>
- This means we will loose support for the following CPU families:
+ This means we will lose support for the following CPU families:
<itemizedlist>
<listitem><para>Intel i586 (all)</para></listitem>
<listitem><para>National Semiconductor Geode
@@ -32,8 +32,8 @@
<para>
AMD Geode LX (as used in the OLPC XO laptop) and later
Geode NX processors should still work. Those interested
- are, of course, welcome to set up a secondary arch for
- older processors
+ are, of course, welcome to set up a secondary architecture
+ for older processors.
</para>
<para>
Benefits:
@@ -42,10 +42,9 @@
Faster binaries on mainstream architectures (Pentium
M, Via C7, all 64-bit arches, Atom)
</para></listitem>
- <listitem><para>
- Realistically, we don't support i586 as a practical
- matter. Enforce that more logically.
- </para></listitem>
+ <listitem><para> Realistically, support for i586 in
+ Fedora 11 was quite limited. This change makes that
+ lack of support a little more clear. </para></listitem>
<listitem><para>
Fewer kernel builds
</para></listitem>
diff --git a/en-US/Desktop.xml b/en-US/Desktop.xml
index e5f27ed..4eb325c 100644
--- a/en-US/Desktop.xml
+++ b/en-US/Desktop.xml
@@ -79,7 +79,7 @@
</para>
</section>
<section id="sect-Release_Notes-Fedora_Desktop-GNOME-Changes">
- <title>Additional imrpovements in GNOME 2.28</title>
+ <title>Additional improvements in GNOME 2.28</title>
<para>
Compared to previous Fedora releases, there are a
number of other changes in the default configuration
@@ -127,7 +127,7 @@ gconftool-2 --type int --set /apps/panel/applets/systray/prefs/padding 0
<indexterm>
<primary>tomboy</primary>
</indexterm>
- <application>Gnote</application> is installed by default in GNOME for this release replacing <application>Tomboy</application>. <application>Gnote</application> is a port of <application>Tomboy</application> from Mono to C++ and consumes fewer resources. <application>Gnote</application> is both an applet that can sit in your GNOME panel as well as a individual application you can run within other desktop environments. Fedora Desktop Live CD since the Fedora 10 release has excluded Mono and hence Mono-based applications like <application>Tomboy</application> due to lack of space. <application>Gnote</application> will be installed by default in the Live CD as well in this release. <application>Tomboy</application> is still available as a optional alternative. If you are upgrading from the previous release you will not be migrated to <application>Gnote</application> and will continue to have <application>Tomboy</application>. <application>Tomboy</application> users can migr
ate easily to <application>Gnote</application> as it shares the file format and a plugin is available in <application>Gnote</application> that will automatically import <application>Tomboy</application> notes on first run. Many of the <application>Tomboy</application> plugins have been ported to <application>Gnote</application>. The following plugins are available as part of <application>Gnote</application>:
+ <application>Gnote</application> is installed by default in GNOME for this release replacing <application>Tomboy</application>. <application>Gnote</application> is a port of <application>Tomboy</application> from Mono to C++ and consumes fewer resources. <application>Gnote</application> is both an applet that can sit in your GNOME panel as well as an individual application you can run within other desktop environments. Fedora Desktop Live CD since the Fedora 10 release has excluded Mono and hence Mono-based applications like <application>Tomboy</application> due to lack of space. <application>Gnote</application> will be installed by default in the Live CD as well in this release. <application>Tomboy</application> is still available as an optional alternative. If you are upgrading from the previous release you will not be migrated to <application>Gnote</application> and will continue to have <application>Tomboy</application>. <application>Tomboy</application> users can mi
grate easily to <application>Gnote</application> as it shares the file format and a plugin is available in <application>Gnote</application> that will automatically import <application>Tomboy</application> notes on first run. Many of the <application>Tomboy</application> plugins have been ported to <application>Gnote</application>. The following plugins are available as part of <application>Gnote</application>:
<itemizedlist>
<listitem><para>Bugzilla Links</para></listitem>
diff --git a/en-US/Devel-Eclipse.xml b/en-US/Devel-Eclipse.xml
index 2c367dc..1c15692 100644
--- a/en-US/Devel-Eclipse.xml
+++ b/en-US/Devel-Eclipse.xml
@@ -17,12 +17,29 @@
and a Verilog/VHDL Editor (<package>eclipse-veditor</package>).
</para>
<para>
- Other major changes in <application>Eclipse</application> plug-ins include the Data
- Tools Platform now contains the full database development
- IDE (<package>eclipse-dtp</package>), the Dynamic Language Toolkit now includes
- Remote System Explorer integration (<package>eclipse-dltk-rse</package>) and
- the Eclipse Modelling Framework SDO component was obsoleted
- and removed (<package>eclipse-emf-sdo</package>).
+ Other major changes in <application>Eclipse</application> plug-ins:
+ <itemizedlist>
+ <listitem>
+ <para>
+ The Data Tools Platform now contains the full database
+ development IDE (<package>eclipse-dtp</package>)
+ </para>
+ </listitem>
+ <listitem>
+ <para>
+ The Dynamic Language Toolkit now includes Remote
+ System Explorer integration
+ (<package>eclipse-dltk-rse</package>)
+ </para>
+ </listitem>
+ <listitem>
+ <para>
+ The Eclipse Modelling Framework SDO component was
+ obsoleted and removed
+ (<package>eclipse-emf-sdo</package>).
+ </para>
+ </listitem>
+ </itemizedlist>
</para>
</section>
diff --git a/en-US/HardwareOverview.xml b/en-US/HardwareOverview.xml
index 5b4a85f..beda116 100644
--- a/en-US/HardwareOverview.xml
+++ b/en-US/HardwareOverview.xml
@@ -135,12 +135,13 @@
<title>Hard disk space requirements for all architectures</title>
<para>
The complete packages can occupy over 9 GB of disk space. Final
- size is entirely determined by the installing spin and the
- packages selected during installation. Additional disk space is
- required during installation to support the installation
- environment. This additional disk space corresponds to the size
- of /Fedora/base/stage2.img (on Installation Disc 1) plus the
- size of the files in /var/lib/rpm on the installed system.
+ size is entirely determined by the type os release being
+ installed and the packages selected during
+ installation. Additional disk space is required during
+ installation to support the installation environment. This
+ additional disk space corresponds to the size of
+ /Fedora/base/stage2.img (on Installation Disc 1) plus the size
+ of the files in /var/lib/rpm on the installed system.
</para>
<para>
In practical terms, additional space requirements may range from
diff --git a/en-US/Networking.xml b/en-US/Networking.xml
index c24ae8e..3da836f 100644
--- a/en-US/Networking.xml
+++ b/en-US/Networking.xml
@@ -13,7 +13,7 @@
<indexterm>
<primary>NetworkManager</primary>
</indexterm>
- <application>NetworkManager</application> can now create and edit system-wide network connections in <filename>/etc/sysconfig</filename>. <application>NetworkManager</application> has been able to read information about system-wide network connections from <filename>/etc/sysconfig</filename> for a while. Now we have enabled full read-write support for system connections. The ability to create or modify new system connections will be controlled by <application>PolicyKit</application> policies. Initially, only wired and wireless connections will be supported. Later on, vpn connections will follow. For connections that require secrets, those will be stored in <filename>.keys</filename> files in <filename>/etc/sysconfig</filename>.
+ <application>NetworkManager</application> can now create and edit system-wide network connections in <filename>/etc/sysconfig</filename>. <application>NetworkManager</application> has been able to read information about system-wide network connections from <filename>/etc/sysconfig</filename> for a while. Now we have enabled full read-write support for system connections. The ability to create or modify new system connections will be controlled by <application>PolicyKit</application> policies. Initially, only wired and wireless connections will be supported. Later on, VPN connections will follow. For connections that require secrets, those will be stored in <filename>.keys</filename> files in <filename>/etc/sysconfig</filename>.
</para>
<para>
@@ -24,7 +24,7 @@
<primary>mobile-broadband-provider-info</primary>
</indexterm>
- By providing a database of preconfigured mobile broadband providers, supporting more hardware, and permitting scanning of GSM networks, <application>NetworkManager</application> makes the use of mobile broadband much easier. Your broadband provider will be automatically recognized by <application>NetworkManager</application> and it will make it easy to just plug it your USB device and get you online within minutes.
+ By providing a database of preconfigured mobile broadband providers, supporting more hardware, and permitting scanning of GSM networks, <application>NetworkManager</application> makes the use of mobile broadband much easier. Your broadband provider will be automatically recognized by <application>NetworkManager</application> and it will make it easy to just plug in your USB device and get you online within minutes.
</para>
</section>
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@
</para>
<para>
- It is planned to switch <application>NetworkManager</application> to <application>netcf</application> as the backend for system-wide network configuration in a future release; while it is not part of this feature, it will further unify the user experience around network configuration. Similarly, it is planned to expose network configuration functionality in a future release of <application>virt-manager</application>.
+ It is planned to switch <application>NetworkManager</application> to <application>netcf</application> as the backend for system-wide network configuration in a future release; while it is not part of this release, it will further unify the user experience around network configuration. Similarly, it is planned to expose network configuration functionality in a future release of <application>virt-manager</application>.
</para>
</section>
@@ -86,7 +86,7 @@
<indexterm>
<primary>Bluetooth</primary>
</indexterm>
- In order to support Bluetooth devices, the Bluetooth background service was started by default in previous versions of Fedora. In this release, the Bluetooth service is started on demand when needed and automatically stops 30 seconds after last device use instead. This reduces initial startup time and resources.
+ In order to support Bluetooth devices, the Bluetooth background service was started by default in previous versions of Fedora. In this release, the Bluetooth service is started on demand when needed and automatically stops 30 seconds after last device use instead. This reduces initial startup time and resource consumption.
</para>
</section>
diff --git a/en-US/OverView.xml b/en-US/OverView.xml
index 6f56ff9..16083e4 100644
--- a/en-US/OverView.xml
+++ b/en-US/OverView.xml
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
<title>Fedora &PRODVER; Overview</title>
<remark>This beat is located here: <ulink type="http" url="https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Docs/Beats/OverView">https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Docs/Beats/OverView</ulink></remark>
<para>
- As always, Fedora continues to develop (<ulink type="http" url="http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Red_Hat_contributions">http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Red_Hat_contributions</ulink>) and integrate the latest free and open source software (<ulink type="http" url="http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Features">http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Features</ulink>). The following sections provide a brief overview of major changes from the last release of Fedora. For more details about other features that are included in Fedora &PRODVER; refer to their individual wiki pages that detail feature goals and progress:
+ As always, Fedora continues to develop (<ulink type="http" url="http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Red_Hat_contributions">http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Red_Hat_contributions</ulink>) and integrate the latest free and open source software (<ulink type="http" url="http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Features">http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Features</ulink>). The following sections provide a brief overview of major changes from the previous release of Fedora. For more details about other features that are included in Fedora &PRODVER; refer to their individual wiki pages that detail feature goals and progress:
</para>
<para>
<ulink type="http" url="http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Releases/12/FeatureList">http://www.fedoraproject.org/wiki/Releases/12/FeatureList</ulink>
diff --git a/en-US/Release_Notes.xml b/en-US/Release_Notes.xml
index a8cd97d..a933b2c 100644
--- a/en-US/Release_Notes.xml
+++ b/en-US/Release_Notes.xml
@@ -44,7 +44,7 @@
<!-- <xi:include href="ServerTools.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"></xi:include> -->
<xi:include href="FileSystems.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"></xi:include>
<xi:include href="Xorg.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"></xi:include>
- <xi:include href="Clusters.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"></xi:include>
+ <!-- <xi:include href="Clusters.xml" xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"></xi:include> -->
</section>
<section id="sect-Release_Notes-Changes_in_Fedora_for_Developers">
diff --git a/en-US/Virtualization.xml b/en-US/Virtualization.xml
index 31439bb..20d9e00 100644
--- a/en-US/Virtualization.xml
+++ b/en-US/Virtualization.xml
@@ -230,7 +230,7 @@
using the general-purpose network configuration library,
netcf. Enhancements to the <package>libvirt</package> API expose
this new functionality to remote managment hosts with
- <package>libvirtd</package>
+ <package>libvirtd</package>.
</para>
<para>
For further details refer to:
diff --git a/en-US/Welcome.xml b/en-US/Welcome.xml
index 226d8d0..6f2ab85 100644
--- a/en-US/Welcome.xml
+++ b/en-US/Welcome.xml
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
<title>Welcome to Fedora</title>
<remark>This beat is located here: <ulink type="http" url="https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Docs/Beats/Welcome">https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Docs/Beats/Welcome</ulink></remark>
<para>
- Fedora is a Linux-based operating system that showcases the latest in free and open source software. Fedora is always free for anyone to use, modify, and distribute. It is built by people across the globe who work together as a community: the Fedora Project. The Fedora Project is open and anyone is welcome to join. The Fedora Project is out front for you, leading the advancement of free, open software and content.
+ Fedora is a Linux-based operating system that showcases the latest in free and open source software. Fedora is always free for anyone to use, modify, and distribute. It is built by people across the globe who work together as a community: the Fedora Project. The Fedora Project is open and anyone is welcome to join. The Fedora Project is out in front for you, leading the advancement of free, open software and content.
</para>
<note>
<para>
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