Fedora 11 Release Announcement FINAL
Max Spevack
mspevack at redhat.com
Sat May 30 08:07:13 UTC 2009
On Fri, 29 May 2009, Eric Christensen wrote:
> Thanks to Jack and Paul for stepping up and really getting the release
> announcement[1] built. We, at Docs, have reviewed the final draft and
> think we are in consensus that it is complete. Please look over it
> and see if anything jumps out at you. If not, this is what we'd like
> to go with.
I like it. It makes me smile, and not much does.
Minor suggestions:
(1) Change Dr. Brattlesworth to some sort of pun on a Fedora name?
Unless Brattlesworth has some other meaning that I simply don't get.
(2) I read "snares, toils, and dangers" as "snares, trolls, and dangers"
at first, which might be funnier!
(3) "that marvelous creature -- Leonidas" -- perhaps "the Leonidas"?
(4) If (3), then s/Leonidas/the Leonidas/ everywhere appropriate
(5) I believe people adjourn to the "parlour" for cigars and brandy, not
the "sitting room". :)
Good stuff.
--Max
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