web/static index.html,1.1,1.2

Paul W. Frields (pfrields) fedora-websites-list at redhat.com
Thu May 17 11:41:10 UTC 2007


Author: pfrields

Update of /cvs/fedora/web/static
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv23484

Modified Files:
	index.html 
Log Message:
Avoid weak gerunds when possible.



Index: index.html
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RCS file: /cvs/fedora/web/static/index.html,v
retrieving revision 1.1
retrieving revision 1.2
diff -u -r1.1 -r1.2
--- index.html	16 May 2007 17:28:06 -0000	1.1
+++ index.html	17 May 2007 11:41:08 -0000	1.2
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@
         Fedora is a Linux operating system that showcases the latest in free and open source software. Fedora is <strong>always free for anyone to use, modify, and distribute.</strong>  It is built by people across the globe who work together as a community: the Fedora Project. The Fedora Project is open and anyone is welcome to join.
         </p>
         <p>
-        The Fedora Project <strong>leads the advancement of free and open source software.</strong>  By using Fedora, the leading edge of software created by the Linux community is in your hands.
+        The Fedora Project <strong>leads the advancement of free and open source software.</strong>  When you use Fedora, the leading edge of software created by the Linux community is in your hands.
         </p>
         <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Overview">Learn more >></a>
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