install-guide fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml,1.11,1.12

[Karsten Wade (kwade)]

Author: kwade

Update of /cvs/docs/install-guide
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv13203

Modified Files:
	fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml 
Log Message:
Publication edit, mainly small edits made highly visible by not filling paragraphs, broken into individual commmits.  Some notes about this review:  this is mainly content -not- XML review, although the XML looks prit-near perfect, and I tried not to tweak the XML for the XML-sake; using 'Fedora' to discuss the 'Fedora Core' OS is a little colloquial, so I tried to catch it where I could, i.e., FED -> FC ... this is akin to 'docs' v. 'documentation'; please read and comment back directly to us author/editors -or- the mailing list.


Index: fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.11
retrieving revision 1.12
diff -u -r1.11 -r1.12
--- fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml	27 May 2005 22:15:15 -0000	1.11
+++ fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml	9 Jun 2005 00:18:23 -0000	1.12
@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@
 
   <para>
     The <application>Setup Agent</application> launches the first time
-    that you start a new &FED; system.  Use <application>Setup
+    that you start a new &FC; system.  Use <application>Setup
       Agent</application> to configure the system for use before you log
     in.
   </para>
@@ -187,7 +187,7 @@
 
     <para>
       If you enable the <guilabel>Enable NTP Broadcast</guilabel>
-      advanced option, &FED; will attempt to automatically locate time
+      advanced option, &FC; will attempt to automatically locate time
       servers on the network.
     </para>
 
@@ -322,7 +322,7 @@
     </tip>
 
     <para>
-      To configure &FED; to use network services for authentication or
+      To configure &FC; to use network services for authentication or
       user information, select <guibutton>Use Network
 	Login...</guibutton>.  <!-- Network authentication is explained
       in a separate tutorial. [Remove this comment when the
@@ -364,22 +364,22 @@
 
     <para>
       Click <guibutton>Play Test Sound</guibutton> to check the sound
-      card configuration.  If the configuration is correct, &FED; plays
+      card configuration.  If the configuration is correct, &FC; plays
       a sound sequence.  If your sound card is identified, but you do
       not hear the sound, check your speakers and try again.
     </para>
 
     <para>
-      You may manually configure a &FED; system to use unsupported sound
+      You may manually configure a &FC; system to use unsupported sound
       cards after the installation process is complete.  Manual sound
-      hardware configuration, however, is beyond the scope of this
+      hardware configuration is beyond the scope of this
       document. 
     </para>
 
     <tip>
       <title>Changing the Sound Card</title>
       <para>
-	&FED; will automatically attempt to detect a new sound card if
+	&FC; will automatically attempt to detect a new sound card if
 	you add one to your system.  If you need to launch the detection
 	process manually, from the main menu, choose <menuchoice>
 	  <guimenu>Desktop</guimenu>
@@ -397,7 +397,7 @@
 
     <para>
       This screen allows you to load prepared discs for installing
-      third-party software.  You cannot use it, however, to install
+      third-party software.  However, you cannot use it to install
       additional packages from the &FC; discs.
     </para>