install-guide fedora-install-guide-abouttoinstall-en.xml, 1.4, 1.5 fedora-install-guide-bootloader-en.xml, 1.5, 1.6 fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml, 1.4, 1.5 fedora-install-guide-firewallconfig-en.xml, 1.4, 1.5 fedora-install-guide-networkconfig-en.xml, 1.4, 1.5 fedora-install-guide-packageselection-en.xml, 1.5, 1.6 fedora-install-guide-rootpassword-en.xml, 1.4, 1.5 fedora-install-guide-timezone-en.xml, 1.3, 1.4

Paul W. Frields (pfrields) fedora-docs-commits at redhat.com
Thu May 12 23:56:00 UTC 2005 

Author: pfrields

Update of /cvs/docs/install-guide
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv3936/install-guide

Modified Files:
	fedora-install-guide-abouttoinstall-en.xml 
	fedora-install-guide-bootloader-en.xml 
	fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml 
	fedora-install-guide-firewallconfig-en.xml 
	fedora-install-guide-networkconfig-en.xml 
	fedora-install-guide-packageselection-en.xml 
	fedora-install-guide-rootpassword-en.xml 
	fedora-install-guide-timezone-en.xml 
Log Message:
Removed "step" counters; additional style editing in Disk Partitioning chapter


Index: fedora-install-guide-abouttoinstall-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-abouttoinstall-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.4
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -r1.4 -r1.5
--- fedora-install-guide-abouttoinstall-en.xml	9 May 2005 20:29:35 -0000	1.4
+++ fedora-install-guide-abouttoinstall-en.xml	12 May 2005 23:55:56 -0000	1.5
@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 <!-- $Id: -->
 
 <chapter id="ch-abouttoinstall">
-  <title>Ninth Step: About to Install</title>
+  <title>About to Install</title>
 
   <warning>
     <title>This is the last point at which you can decide to stop the


Index: fedora-install-guide-bootloader-en.xml
===================================================================
RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-bootloader-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.5
retrieving revision 1.6
diff -u -r1.5 -r1.6
--- fedora-install-guide-bootloader-en.xml	9 May 2005 22:33:18 -0000	1.5
+++ fedora-install-guide-bootloader-en.xml	12 May 2005 23:55:56 -0000	1.6
@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 <!-- $Id: -->
 <chapter id="ch-bootloader">
-  <title>Third Step: Boot Loader</title>
+  <title>Boot Loader</title>
 
   <para>
     A <firstterm>boot loader</firstterm> is a small program that reads


Index: fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml
===================================================================
RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.4
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -r1.4 -r1.5
--- fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml	12 May 2005 22:27:31 -0000	1.4
+++ fedora-install-guide-diskpartitioning-en.xml	12 May 2005 23:55:57 -0000	1.5
@@ -196,8 +196,8 @@
       under <filename>/usr/local</filename>, such as
       <filename>/usr/local/bin/foo</filename>, will be on the
       <filename>/usr/local</filename> partition.  Any other files in
-      <filename>/usr</filename>, such as the
-      <filename>/usr/bin</filename> directory, will be in the
+      <filename>/usr</filename>, such as
+      <filename>/usr/bin/foo</filename>, will be in the
       <filename>/usr</filename> partition.
     </para>
     <para>
@@ -239,11 +239,10 @@
       <indexterm>
 	<primary>Disk Druid</primary>
       </indexterm> is an interactive program for editing disk
-      partitions.  It is only available within the &FC; installation
+      partitions.  Users run it only within the &FC; installation
       system.  Disk Druid supports advanced technologies such as
       <firstterm>RAID</firstterm> and <firstterm>LVM</firstterm>, which
-      provide more extensible and reliable data storage for servers and
-      workstations.
+      provide more extensible and reliable data storage.
     </para>
     <para>
       <application>Disk Druid</application> displays the following
@@ -270,7 +269,10 @@
 	      and <filename>/sbin</filename> directories may not be used
 	      for separate partitions in <application>Disk
 		Druid</application>.  These directories reside on the
-	      <filename>/</filename> (root) partition.
+	      <indexterm>
+		<primary>partition</primary>
+		<secondary>root</secondary>
+	      </indexterm> <filename>/</filename> (root) partition.
 	    </para>
 	  </note>
 	  <important>
@@ -341,10 +343,15 @@
 	    Select this option to edit an existing partition, LVM volume
 	    group, or a LVM physical volume that is not yet part of a
 	    volume group.  If you need to change the size of a LVM
-	    physical volume partition, you will need to remove it from
-	    any volume groups, which will erase any logical volumes it
-	    contains.
+	    physical volume partition, remove it from any volume groups.
 	  </para>
+	  <warning>
+	    <title>Removing LVM Physical Volumes</title>
+	    <para>
+	      If you remove a LVM physical volume from a volume group,
+	      you will erase any logical volumes it contains.
+	    </para>
+	  </warning>
 	  <para>
 	    Edit a partition to change its size, mount point, or file
 	    system type.  Use this function to:
@@ -371,9 +378,16 @@
 	  <note>
 	    <title>Windows Partitions</title>
 	    <para>
-	      You may not label Windows partitions that use the NTFS
-	      file system with a mount point in the &FC; installer.  You
-	      may label <indexterm>
+	      You may not label Windows partitions that use the
+	      <indexterm>
+		<primary>NTFS</primary>
+		<see>file system</see>
+	      </indexterm>
+	      <indexterm>
+		<primary>file system</primary>
+		<secondary>NTFS</secondary>
+	      </indexterm> NTFS file system with a mount point in the
+	      &FC; installer.  You may label <indexterm>
 		<primary>vfat</primary>
 		<see>file system</see>
 	      </indexterm>
@@ -388,17 +402,19 @@
 	    If you need to make sweeping changes to your partition
 	    configuration, consider starting over.  If your disk
 	    contains data that you need to keep, back it up before you
-	    edit your partitions.  If you edit the sizes of your
-	    partitions, you will likely lose all data on those
-	    partitions.
+	    edit any partitions.  If you edit the size of a partition,
+	    you may lose all data on it.
 	  </para>
 	  <para>
-	    If you have many separate partitions for system and user
-	    data, it will be easier for you to upgrade your system.  The
+	    If your system contains many separate partitions for system
+	    and user data, it is easier to upgrade your system. The
 	    installation program allows you to erase or retain data on
 	    specific partitions.  If your user data is on a separate
-	    <filename>/home</filename> partition, you may retain that
-	    data while erasing system partitions like
+	    <indexterm>
+	      <primary>partition</primary>
+	      <secondary><filename>/home</filename></secondary>
+	    </indexterm> <filename>/home</filename> partition, you may
+	    retain that data while erasing system partitions such as
 	    <filename>/boot</filename>.  
 	  </para>
 	</listitem>
@@ -453,7 +469,7 @@
 		<para>
 		  Choose this option to construct a RAID device from two
 		  or more existing software RAID partitions.  This
-		  option is only available if two or more software RAID
+		  option is available if two or more software RAID
 		  partitions have been configured.
 		</para>
 	      </listitem>
@@ -465,7 +481,7 @@
 		<para>
 		  Choose this option to set up a RAID
 		  <firstterm>mirror</firstterm> of an existing disk.
-		  This option is only available if two or more disks are
+		  This option is available if two or more disks are
 		  attached to the system.
 		</para>
 	      </listitem>
@@ -477,11 +493,11 @@
 	<term><guilabel>LVM</guilabel></term>
 	<listitem>
 	  <para>
-	    Select this button to set up LVM on your &FED; system.  You
-	    must first create at least one partition or software RAID
-	    device as a LVM physical volume, using the
-	    <guilabel>Add</guilabel> option in the main
-	    <application>Disk Druid</application> dialog.
+	    Select this button to set up LVM on your &FED; system.
+	    First create at least one partition or software RAID device
+	    as a LVM physical volume, using the <guilabel>Add</guilabel>
+	    option in the main <application>Disk Druid</application>
+	    dialog.
 	  </para>
 	  <important>
 	    <title>Understanding LVM Components</title>
@@ -491,9 +507,8 @@
 	      apportioned for one or more logical volumes.  Logical
 	      volumes function much like standard data partitions.  They
 	      have a file system type, such as ext3, and a mount point.
-	      An administrator may grow or shrink logical volumes
-	      without disturbing any data, unlike standard disk
-	      partitions.
+	      An administrator can grow or shrink logical volumes
+	      without destroying data, unlike standard disk partitions.
 	    </para>
 	  </important>
 	  <para>
@@ -507,20 +522,20 @@
 	  <para>
 	    You may not remove a physical volume from a volume group if
 	    doing so would leave insufficient space for that group's
-	    logical volumes.  For example, imagine a volume group made
-	    up of two 5 GB LVM physical volume partitions, which houses
-	    a logical volume that is 8 GB in size.  The installer will
-	    not allow you to remove either of the component physical
-	    volumes, since that would leave only 5 GB in the group for
-	    an 8 GB logical volume.  If you reduce the total size of any
-	    logical volumes appropriately, you may then remove a
-	    physical volume from the volume group.
+	    logical volumes.  Take for example a volume group made up of
+	    two 5 GB LVM physical volume partitions, which houses an 8
+	    GB logical volume.  The installer would not allow you to
+	    remove either of the component physical volumes, since that
+	    would leave only 5 GB in the group for an 8 GB logical
+	    volume.  If you reduce the total size of any logical volumes
+	    appropriately, you may then remove a physical volume from
+	    the volume group.
 	  </para>
 	</listitem>
       </varlistentry>
     </variablelist>
     <para>
-      When you have finished setting up and reviewing your partition
+      After you finish setting up and reviewing your partition
       configuration, select <guilabel>Next</guilabel> to continue the
       installation process.
     </para>


Index: fedora-install-guide-firewallconfig-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-firewallconfig-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.4
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -r1.4 -r1.5
--- fedora-install-guide-firewallconfig-en.xml	9 May 2005 22:22:12 -0000	1.4
+++ fedora-install-guide-firewallconfig-en.xml	12 May 2005 23:55:57 -0000	1.5
@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 <!-- $Id: -->
 
 <chapter id="ch-firewallconfig">
-  <title>Fifth Step: Firewall Configuration</title>
+  <title>Firewall Configuration</title>
 
   <para>
     The default security configuration for &FC; will protect your system


Index: fedora-install-guide-networkconfig-en.xml
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RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-networkconfig-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.4
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -r1.4 -r1.5
--- fedora-install-guide-networkconfig-en.xml	9 May 2005 22:39:03 -0000	1.4
+++ fedora-install-guide-networkconfig-en.xml	12 May 2005 23:55:58 -0000	1.5
@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 <!-- $Id: -->
 
 <chapter id="ch-networkconfig">
-  <title>Fourth Step: Network Configuration</title>
+  <title>Network Configuration</title>
 
   <para>
     This screen enables you to customize the network settings of the


Index: fedora-install-guide-packageselection-en.xml
===================================================================
RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-packageselection-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.5
retrieving revision 1.6
diff -u -r1.5 -r1.6
--- fedora-install-guide-packageselection-en.xml	12 May 2005 00:43:48 -0000	1.5
+++ fedora-install-guide-packageselection-en.xml	12 May 2005 23:55:58 -0000	1.6
@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 <!-- $Id: -->
 
 <chapter id="ch-packageselection">
-  <title>Eighth Step: Package Selection</title>
+  <title>Package Selection</title>
 
   <para>
     The installation type that you chose earlier in the process is used


Index: fedora-install-guide-rootpassword-en.xml
===================================================================
RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-rootpassword-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.4
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -r1.4 -r1.5
--- fedora-install-guide-rootpassword-en.xml	10 May 2005 21:25:56 -0000	1.4
+++ fedora-install-guide-rootpassword-en.xml	12 May 2005 23:55:58 -0000	1.5
@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 <!-- $Id: -->
 
 <chapter id="ch-rootpassword">
-  <title>Seventh Step: Set the Root Password</title>
+  <title>Set the Root Password</title>
 
   <para>
     The <firstterm>root account</firstterm> on every Linux system is


Index: fedora-install-guide-timezone-en.xml
===================================================================
RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-timezone-en.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.3
retrieving revision 1.4
diff -u -r1.3 -r1.4
--- fedora-install-guide-timezone-en.xml	9 May 2005 22:47:14 -0000	1.3
+++ fedora-install-guide-timezone-en.xml	12 May 2005 23:55:58 -0000	1.4
@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 <!-- $Id: -->
 
 <chapter id="ch-timezone">
-  <title>Sixth Step: Time Zone Selection</title>
+  <title>Time Zone Selection</title>
 
   <para>
       You must specify the correct time zone for the location of your

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